Perhaps not a true writing exercise because, for the life of me, I can't think of what this is teaching me other than getting me to appreciate metaphor a little more.
The first sentence is the original and I merely replaced all the "in's" with "is's." What fun!
1.
the fruit picker who lived all those years in a motel (incomplete sentence and only moderately interesting)
The fruit picker who lived all those years is a motel. (Ahhh, now there is something to ponder and within the trappings of a proper sentence to boot)
2.
The carrot shaving in my salad looks suspicious. (Hmm, I think I am already losing steam)
The carrot shaving is my salad (and) looks suspicious. (Yeah, this is already becoming redundant. Perhaps I should quit while I still care.)
Point is, I recently acquired a second means of some income. I am writing copy for Hayneedle.com. Product descriptions and so on. It is extremely gratifying and taxing because I get to come up with charming and witty paragraphs about things I rarely ever think about let alone write about and I am also responsible for coding a great deal of what I write. HTML. Good grief.
Anyway, so I tried to come up with a writing exercise before I dig into another task. This was the best I could come up with without consulting other people. Sort of failed but the carrot thing was kind of silly so maybe not an entire loss.
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